Myths and heros

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Si je puis me permettre, sociologiquement les migrants sont des travailleurs facilement manipulables qui auraient été parfaits pour M. Ford.

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MYTHS AND HEROS


I’m going to present the notion of myths and heros. To define what is a myth, I would say that’s a fiction, which explains an event or tell the story of a hero. A hero is a character who has a relevant role, he embodies values as honor, loyalty, fame, generosity and has so many physical qualities. It is a model to be followed. Heroism is a synonym of perfection ? Firstly, yes heroism is perfection, but the contrary can be right too.

To begin, we can assert that heroism is a sign of perfection. To illustrate this part of the notion, I chose to speak about Rosa Park. In a video studied in class " Eulogy for Rosa Parks " I discover she is an exceptional woman who refused sixty years ago to give her place in the bus for a white person. At that time, in the bus there were places for the white people and for the black people. With her gesture, this black woman made a big step in the fight against racism. 60 years later, his brave gesture became a real symbol. She became a hero.

We can also speak about M?decins Sans Fronti?res which is an agency of medical aid which changed the face of humanitarian aid. We studied through an oral understanding that the work of these doctors all over the world, with the example of where it was the first humanitarian group which stayed after the civil war, all the hospitals in the country were closed by what the health workers were not present. They brought their help, their care and comfort to the population bruised and hurt by the war. Thus we can consider that doctors this type of group are perfect heroes, we can only admire them in the face of the courage.

Secondly, we can say that sometimes the heroism is not a synonym for perfection. For instance in class, we studied Henry Ford with the article "modern times". The people called him "the great American of his time", it is true that he was the biggest automobile manufacturer in the world, he has create numerous jobs but he had his own politics of labour : he clearly specified that he wanted American workers who did not smoke, drink, read or think and that these workers marry American people. Thus we can think that Ford does not want immigrants or protesters who could question his decisions where his way of working and he was very stiff. Thus, I cannot refrain from thinking that Ford was a hero but a perfect hero.

So, in class we owe studied a hero of the years 196o. I chose Mohamed Ali. It is a big champion of boxing, triples world champion, he won numerous fights. By his fame, he fight against racism. However this big champion was debated in particular in 1964, during the fight with Sonny Liston who would have been forged. So, he took drugs for taken away by the titles. Moreover in 1967, has New York State Athletic Commission decided to remove to Mohamed Ali his first title of champion of the world of heavy trucks, won three years earlier but the found motive was that it refused to leave fighting for the United States in Vietnam to not to tarnish its image
I recognize that Mohamed Ali is a hero, he became a symbolic personality, he is a member of the small number of personalities who, by their actions and by their commitment, are members from now on of the inheritance of the humanity. Unfortunately, he is affected now by the Parkinson's disease since 1982 and died on June 03rd, 2016. We can say that it is a hero but not a perfect hero.

To conclude, we can say that the heroism is a synonym for perfection because some people in the company have the perseverance, the determination and never gives up just like Rosa Parks. We saw that the heroes are not perfected but rest before any extraordinary people because they not his step before any human beings?